Will poets that are Nautilus in soul, rate this re-Postally poem? c/c if you may?

[Fog Horns]



Nautilus on a cargo vessel, to avail,

devoid of an older route, and drift

his beats of abreacted pulse, to trail,

his home-land on cloudy forms, to lift.



Long locked in dreams, assemblage,

soul sails forward, spilled life's wine,

in Nordic Northern seas, God Brage,

unworldly lyrics to compose, in brine.



I reckon he befits an Angel, alone,

he plays a harmonica in broken notes,

a song for loners or friends, gone,

mistral petals him along, as boat floats.



I reckon he remembers her, a Naiad,

the sun crowns his head, away setting,

a dalliance, a harbor song, her bard,

depicting of his solitude's odd wedding.



In dark she comes, from away shore,

along windy fog-horns eerie call, in air,

she gliding sails, comely to invite afore,

Nautilus and all drifting souls, in despair.



She comes as bow-bells ring, and sings:

'Enfold me in your lone heart, and I,

shall lift your soul, with halcyon wings,

to fly in incipient stills, to imbue of nigh.'



She sings along, as drifts of mist repeat:

'Enfold me in your lone heart, and I,

shall lift your soul, with halcyon wings,

to fly in incipient stills, to imbue of nigh.'



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Copyright 漏 - G. V.- 11.29.2011

/ P.H. 28985177Will poets that are Nautilus in soul, rate this re-Postally poem? c/c if you may?
It blows me away that you are Greek and can write so well in English;

(maybe you can write on the riots now occuring sadly in your country)



I had to look up halcyon - apparently a bird that can still the seas.



this is spectacular:



'Enfold me in your lone heart, and I,

shall lift your soul, with halcyon wings,

to fly in incipient stills, to imbue of nigh.'





good job
Yes, not bad. But take out the "I reckon....." phrasing. It sounds at odds with fancier language in the rest of the poem. Unless your from the North of England, of course...Will poets that are Nautilus in soul, rate this re-Postally poem? c/c if you may?
Interesting poem!
I've only seen the ocean a small handful of times, so every trip you take us on is an adventure for me.Will poets that are Nautilus in soul, rate this re-Postally poem? c/c if you may?
Gio

Man, Nautilus in soul, I hope.

I liken some of your poems to, say, a bird. I know what a bird is, and that some are beautiful birds. That they can fly, and that I envy that freedom they display. However, do I know the intricacies of each type of bird? No. Can I identify each bird type? No. Lots of No's, yet I know a bird nevertheless, and the beauty they display.

Or.....as simple as my Mom's cooking (when I was younger and lived at home). I loved here cooking. Every night she has something that tasted so good I could smell it, but ask me what she cooked the previous week, say, the prior Monday, and I can't tell you.

So it is with your poetry. The ones you add romanticism and beauty to are something to behold, and the added flavor of the Nautilus, and the sea, and mostly, the ships, whether it be a cargo vessel or a fighting ship, Swooping in are the angels on high, and the solitude of an old wedding.

Masterful Gio, but I do not always understand it's detail, just like in bird scenario.

So, a great poem, one I love, lifted on halcyon wings, and one I journey with you in trust.

Edit: reading others answers after my answer, I always like to see what people say and their perspective, if I agree or disagree. One poster suggested you delete your use of "I reckon"
somewhat of a conundrum some might think, but I like it and hope it stays. In fact, for a Greek man, it is quite masterful to employ that language. I am a learned man, well educated, but, being in the south, and also identifying with my fellow brothers and sisters, often say "I reckon" so----it sounds right to me. Am 'fix-in' to go read my novel.